Shall We Dance? (Maiden Update #4)

So I finished the working draft for Maiden before Christmas and sent it out to a few beta-readers, including my wife.  When you hear one thing, you can dismiss it.  When you hear it again, there might be something.  But when multiple people give you the same exact feedback…you listen.

What was the feedback?
“For the love of all that’s holy we (the reader) need to know how Corwin and Jeanette feel about each other?  Don’t leave it so bottled up.  Give us SOMETHING towards the beginning of the book.”
Well, that’s not exactly what everybody said, but that’s the jist of it.  So as I have spent the last three weeks taking time to revise and edit and improve the book one of the ideas that came from all the suggestions was a dance scene.  It’s set in a mideival-ish time, they are having a festival, why wouldn’t they have a dance?  It’s perfect!  (Sidenote: Every movie I can think of off the top of my head that I have researched for this story has a dance scene…A Knight’s Tale being among my favorite).  Not sure why I didn’t think of it before, but that’s one of the blessings of a) letting others see your work and b) accepting the feedback they give you to help improve your story)
So today, I am glad to announce, that I finished the dance scene – and all the feedback the beta-readers gave me was correct (of course).  It has helped to build more interest in the characters, has helped to build some conflict, and has helped to solidify what direction the story needs to go.
So when in doubt…dance:-)
PS – a few weeks ago I asked on Facebook what the name of the song is that should be playing when Corwin and Jeanette dance for the first time.  I got a lot of responses and the current working title is ‘The Maiden’s Walk’.  It’s a slow dance, and the traditional dances back then were more of a group walk/turn/separate kind of interaction.
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